Students
from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some
people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To
what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays,
it is acknowledged that students from suburban areas find it tough to receive
higher education. Whether it should be made easier for them to access
university education becomes an ongoing concern, which incurs a highly-charged
debate.
Obviously,
higher education opportunities bring about benefits to students in multiple
ways. For example, to receive higher education becomes increasingly important
to senior high school graduates, partly becasue it determines if they have the
competitive edge in the job market, and partly because it is seen as a
guarantee of a certain level of the mental ability, from the computer literacy
that is required by the most employers to the capacities of acquiring new
knowledge the soonest possible which is valued by the most workplaces. With a
university degree, students from rural areas will obtain a job easily, thereby
bettering their living conditions and their family as well.
Higher
education also, however, tend to impose a heavy burden on their families since
the relenting rise in the tuition fees which are - increasingly beyond those
families’ ability to afford. In addition, with the mounting evidence, a
university degree is not always a guarantee of seizing a decent job; therefore,
their living conditions are likely to worse off by not able to earn back their
tuition fee after graduation. In this way, some people argue, students from
rural areas are not well-advised to pursue a university degree. But I perceive
their desire to further their education should not be disrespected and the
government should subsidise them to receive higher education.
In
conclusion, university education should be made fair to everyone, predicated
only on their academic performance and mental abilities, rather than their
financial capacities and the government should subsidise those students in
need.
Teacher’s
comment: Not all the parts of the task were covered. The writer’s position is
relevant to task prompt, the main ideas are also relevant but not all of them
are developed well enough. The information is presented coherently, it is
evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another.The linking words and phrases are used in a correct way. The range of
vocabulary is sufficient here. There are some attempts to use more
sophisticated words but many of them are inaccurate. Even though there are some
errors in grammar and punctuation, they don’t make the meaning much harder to
understand. Overall, this essay seems worthy of IELTS Band 6.
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